First Reflection (second step)

Thanks to readers who helped me with the first draft. Everyone liked Ver. 1 of the first stanza. Easy. Votes leaned toward the last line of Ver. 2, less conclusively. I dropped it on my sister’s painting and now have 3 versions of the last line, if anyone still wants to vote.


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13 thoughts on “First Reflection (second step)

    • Thanks, Tanmay. That’s the one inherited from the earlier draft — less tinkered with. The tinkering was trying to see if I could sculpt in a rhyme or poke the rhythm a little. For now, I will go with your vote (since it’s the first one 🙂 ) — on the priority of content/atmosphere.

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